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smiley07.gif posted on 6-30-2009 at 02:28 AM
Would like feedback on 1st person anti-hero story.


Hullo everybody,

My first time posting an actual thread but curiosity got the best of me. I recently wrote a one-shot about a teenager with super abilities enrolled in a Superhero Academy (think, Sky High) that he doesn't want to be in. Cliche? Maybe and I never would have wrote it if it wasn't for this particular writing group right here. [/props]

Back to the one-shot. I rarely use first person and that's what I'd like people to comment on rather than the plot. But any kind of feedback would be fine too just moreso on the narration... >.>

Because of it's length I've published it on Google Docs to make it easier on people (I hope).

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Thank you in advance!

[Edited on 6-30-2009 by Calarenice]




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[*] posted on 7-2-2009 at 04:35 PM


I think it's excellent. The narrator has a nice, wry style that I like and to me 1st person fits.
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[*] posted on 7-7-2009 at 05:35 PM


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Originally posted by youngshay112
I think it's excellent. The narrator has a nice, wry style that I like and to me 1st person fits.


Thanks for the feedback! I was wondering when someone would reply... >.>




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[*] posted on 7-17-2009 at 02:32 PM


First person definitely fits this piece of work.
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