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[*] posted on 7-16-2009 at 02:26 AM


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That made me laugh. I guess I should be scared of the evil demons but I just laughed at him trying to hit her with everything possible.

Poor superstitious little secret police thug. And of course he narrates his own death at the end of his report. For his narration is an official report he writes as he dies from his wounds (an idea I got from Double Indemnity). I wanted to tell the story from the bad guy's perspective. I haven't posted or published enough stories about Desiree yet to make it clear that she's the hero.




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[*] posted on 7-17-2009 at 04:49 AM


Okay. Here's the opening to the next Spanner Side Story after "Destroying Angels". This next story, "Cybugs", grew out of this LiveScience article. It's the first of the series that stars Spanner herself; in fact, she does one of her rare narrations, in the form of a bloglike "transmission" (basically a development of the podcast).

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From "Cybugs":

Public transmission of Spanner (Shira M. Richter-Thomas) on 18 July 6021 (2021 New Christian)
Mind control is one of the oldest of the black arts, long predating science and even civilization. Take the voodoo zombi: not the flesh-eating corpse of countless clichéd horror movies, but a pretechnological human robot created by drugs and torture, a slave to the sorcerer’s will. Sure enough, every government and corporation in the king of the hill game called world politics obsessively pours countless billions of whatever they call their currency into mind control projects if they can afford it. Since the days of the Corporate Empire [which overthrew the US in 2011 and lasted till 2016 – Author], all sorts of mind-control technologies have run amuck.

It doesn’t have to be humans, either. The most popular WMDs among the State Capitalist empires that rule the world today are the fast-reproducing, easy to manufacture cybugs. Massed, governments use them to eat entire "enemy" populations alive; individually, they are a popular means of political assassination.

But Charles Darwin isn't the greatest philosophy of strategy in history for no reason. If you build a weapon, someone will create the countermeasure: shields against swords, blue shield against gray goo. As long as people kill each other for the right to rule (read: enslave) everybody else, there will always be a demand for ever crazier weapons.

During the Corporate War, I developed a microchip implant we put into birds' brains. The chip traces the presence of cybugs; if it detects at least one, it sends the bird to eat it. I realized that someone had developed a new cybug nanochip undetectable to my cybug-eating birds when I saw an ichneumon wasp fly up the nose of exiled Russian opposition leader Ivan Belko. Suddenly he convulsed, screamed in pain, collapsed twitching on the floor, then died. The wasp crawled out of its victim's nose and flew a beeline toward me. I swatted it, then scraped the remains into a small evidence bag so I could analyze it later.

Later, the evening transmission carried news that another prominent exile, Vitaly Shoshin, had been killed the same way. The video captured the death, the panic as everybody around him fled, and the winged termite that flew out of his nose after feasting on his brain.

I rushed to the lab I set up in my bedroom. I had a robot microarm extract the chip from the wasp remains, then connect it to the computer I use for the dangerous jobs. Sure enough, it was still receiving. I traced the transmission to – the heavily guarded residence of Vitaly Shoshin.

Something stank about this.

[EDIT: corrections, including one grammatical one.]

[Edited on 7-17-2009 by DennisJernberg]




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[*] posted on 7-17-2009 at 04:21 PM


This is from my second project. It's a little splash of their relationship.

the world inside
Anna looked at the globe in fascination. The ball of glass glimmered entrancingly in the light seeping in through a crack in the heavy drapery. She turned it upside down. Glitter whirled around like a storm had devastated the area. She turned it back up. The fake snow danced like someone who knew nobody was watching.

She could see Josh smiling at her from the corner of her eye. She ignored him, instead staring at the beautiful figures within. A man, chopping wood for the coming winter. A log cabin the size of her thumbnail. The layer of angel white snow that covered the ground, the trees, lining the roof of the cabin. It was all marvelous.

“Happy anniversary,” Josh said. Anna found herself echoing his words, not paying any attention to what she was seeing, so enraptured by the snow globe. It was a world within a universe of endless possibilities.

She turned it upside down.




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[*] posted on 7-20-2009 at 05:57 AM


The climax of Mind Bomb has deliberately odd midsentence paragraph divisions:
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from "Mind Bomb":
The killers look around, all over, at each other, expecting the worst. They do not expect even worse

when it hits them. The mind bomb

that destroyed the all-conquering mind of the rampaging supervillain once known as the Crusader now bursts into the far weaker brains of ten far more primitive killers driven by pure hatred and superstitious fear, overwhelming them with absolute pain beyond pain, frying neurons and fusing synapses

till their blasted minds burn out and ten cold-blooded killers all fall dead.
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A more representative passage. Or maybe not so; this is the backstory media feed that serves as the middle section (note: it takes place in 2017, a year after the revolution that destroys the Corporate Empire in Spanner):
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from "Mind Bomb":
Rewind a few hours, to when the hostage crisis began. The live news feeds tracked the terrorists since their abortive attempt to overthrow the Cascadian state government with just under a hundred fanatical super soldiers. The police and state militia drove them out of Olympia; by the time they got to Seattle to take hostages, there were only ten. Let’s catch up on the biggest local feed, with presenter Amanda Currie:

Currie: “We have breaking news: The terrorist group calling itself the ‘Aryan Dominion of Cascadia’ has taken over the former Bon Marché department store in downtown Seattle. We have learned from our sources on the ground that of the ninety-eight terrorists who attempted to overthrow the state government and impose a racist dictatorship, only ten are left who have not been killed or captured. They have sent their demands on video:”

Ratz (on dark grainy digital video): “A message to the white people of Cascadia: Join our holy crusade for the restoration of white supremacy, or be punished as traitors to the race! To the inferior races occupying our holy land, and their Jew occupation government: we demand total unconditional surrender now, or you will be utterly annihilated. Until you surrender and proclaim the Aryan Dominion your eternal kingdom, we will kill one hostage an hour.”

Currie: "Cascadia Live News security analyst Imram Shomron is here with us to give us the details. Imram, what is this 'Aryan Dominion' group?"

Shomron (his accent is vaguely pan-European): “They are a militant splinter group that formed when the Aryan Nations and other Nazi organizations, such as the Ku Klux Klan and the various National Fronts, split into ‘Israelite’ and ‘True Aryan’ factions because of the Israeli civil war. The ‘Israelites’ defected from the Euro-American racial supremacist movement to unite with the victorious Messianist side in Israel alongside the former Christian Zionists when the Messianists expelled the surviving secular and moderate Jews along with the Palestinian Arabs from Israeli territory.”

Currie: “How did that drive the remaining racist factions into greater violence?”

Shomron: “It’s simple. For a powerful faction like the National Socialist Alliance that once held power in the Euro-American Parliament, a sudden loss of size like that leads to loss of power. For those dependent on power, loss of power means humiliation. And humiliation drives proud and once-powerful men to violence. Hence the ‘Aryan Dominion’ crisis occurring right now here in Cascadia.”

Currie: “Can you explain the names the surviving terrorists gave police? Like Ratz, Worm, Snake, Pig, and so on?”

Shomron: “From what I gather, the choice of names like this for a faction that intends to be a new paramilitary aristocracy signifies nothing less than ‘the last shall be made first...’”
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And now for something completely different: Here's how Dissociated Press renders (or rather, dismembers) a passage in "Mind Bomb":

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Sound like what happens to you after the Mind Bomb scrambles your brain?
(I have both Emacs and XEmacs, and both have Dissociated Press as a feature. I used XEmacs to apply letter-based Dissociated Press to a text version of "Mind Bomb".)

[Edited on 7-20-2009 by DennisJernberg]




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[*] posted on 7-23-2009 at 02:01 AM


I quoted the opening of "Cybugs" above. Now I've finally gotten around to finishing it. The whole thing's now at
http://spannersworld.blogspot.com/2009/07/cybugs-spanner-sid...




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