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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 04:18 PM
First Line Game


Just to help everyone get started on their idea and see how they want to formulate their novel's beginning. Post your first line and see if the next person can figure out what it's about!

Still thinking so I'll let someone else start out. :)




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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 04:25 PM


I dare the next poster to tell me which one of those two to use. Also, look at my signature for the possible opening scene or something. But please, please help me choose, 'cause I have no idea. :C

First possible opening line: “Hey, Everett—Oops!”

Second possible opening line: “If these are right, you were in prison for beating three men to death—with an umbrella.”

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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 04:27 PM


Whelp, here's my tentative first line. Seems a bit wordy for a starter sentence though.

"One should know better than to have a perfectly planned evening."


EDIT: The latter amuses me. :D

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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 04:31 PM


That seems like a line my MC's dad would say... It sounds like someone's reflecting on a bad day.


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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 04:36 PM


It sounds like someone's getting fired at a job.

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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 04:37 PM


Kinda makes me shiver a bit, Ender.

Ooh, eerie, Jasmine. I like it.

Prologue first line:

"He ignored the heat, he ignored the sun, he ignored the people passing him who stated at his slightly out-of-place expression—nothing in the world existed for the young man walking down the street except the rundown, soon-to-be-demolished old building toward which he was headed."

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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 07:16 PM


Arg. Nothing mysterious about that. It reminds me of chapter one in Crime and Punishment.

Another candidate for the first lines:
"Katie!"
The failed call for a person goes unanswered while I dig through the clothing Daddy bought me yesterday when he found out where I was.
"Katie!" he calls again.
Oh wait- I think that's my name!




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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 09:07 PM


Ooh, I like that one even better, Ender!

Candidate for the first line of the story itself:

"It's the middle of June, it's a beautiful day, two of you have a birthday, and your four are playing video games." The owner of the voice which had uttered the offending comment was apparent when we looked up to see two girls standing in the doorway, one with her arms crossed and already dressed, the other slightly disheveled, as though she'd thrown on her clothes in a hurry, and was tying her unruly sand-colored curls back into a ponytail.

Sorta long and two sentences, but that's one option.




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[*] posted on 6-29-2011 at 11:21 PM


"For the second time in his short tenure as a soldier, he was awoken by a bucket of water to the face."

Yeah, I'm starting in the middle of the story ._. And his superior is a big bag of jerk.
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[*] posted on 6-30-2011 at 12:57 AM


That sounds like a historical or war novel. I'm guessing that this character is a bit naive and/or a slacker.

A possible opener: "The crowds of blue, the tiny flags billowing as they were waved, the cacophony of voices shouting and chanting, the extravagantly decorated floats--none of it gave a sign of the catalyst that would set change in motion."
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[*] posted on 6-30-2011 at 03:42 AM


Ooh. Sounds like it'll draw you right in when you start reading it! Some sort of parade or march is going on I assume?

Ok. So this is the start (technically two sentences but meh...)

'There were footsteps passing by in the corridor, sounds outside my windows, people talking in the corridor, I could hear it all. But most of all I could hear the angry breathing of my brother as he recieved news of my injuries...'





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[*] posted on 6-30-2011 at 08:03 PM


A hospital, isn't it? I like the description and the action raises questions in the reader. (And makes him read further, jackpot!)

'Let me tell you a story.'

(Full starting paragraph: Let me tell you a story. My name is Joshua, who I am or who you are doesn’t matter. What matters is what I’m here to tell you. Pay attention. I don’t want to waste my time.)
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 07:41 AM


I don't know what it might be about, but it's hooked me in. I'm thinking maybe something to do with war, or crime? From the first paragraph, at least.

Mine:

Quote:
Lying back against the pillows of his bed, Cole reached down to slide the envelope out of his school bag.


It'll probably change, as I think there's a scene or two to come before this... But that's the current first line. ^^





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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 07:52 AM


That reminds me of someone who's received an important letter and is trying to relax themselves before they open it. Or perhaps just a casual letter.

My first line.

'It's been nearly a lifetime.'




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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 07:56 AM


^ Makes me think that a significant event is coming up.


I had a few potential openings lined up, but I went with:

    I don’t photograph as well as Marilyn Monroe, and I don’t drip talent like Fred Astaire, but still the fat boy in blue jeans snaps the lens and says to me, “You’re beautiful, laddie; you’re a natural – lift your chin for me – are you sure you haven’t done this before?”




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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 08:24 AM


My opening paragraph, since the first couple sentences don't tell you much (and even the full paragraph is a bit ambiguous as to what the story is about):

There is only time. Whatever else may or may not "exist," however we may choose to define such an ambiguous word, time endures. It moves inexorably from one instant to the next. In those localized pockets of spacetime it may be slowed, pulled down to a more sedate pace, but it does not stop. The universe does not abide any circumstance of timelessness. At the event horizon of a black hole, where time has no meaning, the universe simply pinches it off, torn away from the rest of reality forever. And once the heat death of the universe takes hold, when no reactions of matter and energy occur anywhere in this dimension, time will still continue. It will hold in itself, frozen, a dead place, devoid of potential. Spent.
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 08:25 AM


I like it, it tells a lot about the character's personality in a few words. And it makes me want to know why he's being photographed.

For the moment, mine is:

"Has anyone seen my shoes?"
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 09:02 AM


I find it to be quite funny and it has got me wondering why your character has lost his shoes.

My first sentence:

"Most people say the last year of high school was the best period of time in their lives."




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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 09:12 AM


That's definitely a line a lot of people can relate to.
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 10:20 AM


Mine is sort of simple and cliche:

“Do you think she’s alive?”
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 11:23 AM


I got this immediate picture in my head of a couple of little kids squatting down at the edge of a ravine, looking down at a woman lying face-down in the dirt below, unmoving. It's kind of an awesome opening scene, actually, even if it's not the one you've really written, haha.

Here's mine:

"This happened before they found the heretics."




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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 11:34 AM


Ooo, I like yours :) And that's not the scene exactly, but I like the mental image it gave you.
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 12:19 PM


I'm really imagining that being about a murder that has to do with these mysterious heretics... So someone's like "you think THIS is crazy? that was before we figured out that there were heretics about!" I like it.


so my first line is:

“I don’t like this,” Anna muttered.
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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 03:52 PM


Mine:



Perfect, yes, perfect.

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[*] posted on 7-1-2011 at 04:03 PM


Julia: (assuming that is your first line, because there was nothing in your post to really indicate whether it was or not...) Makes me imagine someone's just finished building something... like an evil robot. O.o

The first line of my prologue is:

The sun was just beginning to set over the bleak city landscape.

(It really doesn't tell you much about the story at all. >_< )

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